busboys and poets

Well, I'm not familiar with the British grading system, but according to the American system I'd give this a C+ or B-, depending on how benevolent I was feeling that ...

Erm... is there a point to this? Stole the words from beneath my fingertips. Also, I agree that this comes across more as fiction than essay. Consider switching forums.

A lazy writer is annoying. True that.

Michael: I thought to. Should be "thought so," yes? Make very man a king Make 'every' man a king? I’d love to have the satisfaction of pushing off before me. ...

Amen to most unoriginal. Also, your formatting, particularly in the beginning, made it difficult to get through. Trim the fat, keep the good stuff.

I agree with smorg. This is rather too short, and you really should insert colons. It would prevent the reader from becoming confused.

I am not Christian, or even religious, but I can appreciate religious/spiritual poetry and prose. What I cannot forgive is apologizing for your faith, as you did in the summary ...

:lol: Brava!

Oh, my city. =] I'm going to review the new edition solely; I hope this is okay. 1. Cement sidewalks Crisscross my pavement And iron buildings dig their feet Deep ...

You may be a good writer for your age, but there are quite a few things along the grammatical and punctuation lines. I've listed a few below: There once was ...